Not played for long:
Intro is intriguing,
BUT: I don't know if it's a question of getting used to, but I find the dialogue system awkward, reading on the right side of the screen and then checking boxes to advance feels cumbersome. Like, I prefer to look in the same general direction for image AND text, and no box clicking please, especially when there is only ONE choice...!
I don't think the ratio "inner monologue versus sex scenes" is the problem really... I am gonna be blunt here, but really those monologues are waaaay too long and dragging, in the way that the thoughts of the character barely make any progress at all or trigger anything. When you have a dialogue scene between the son and the mother and the inner monologues of BOTH make up for 90% of the text you read, then you have a problem. It just slows downs everything, it becomes boring, also because the images for the scene are basically 3 different angles and expressions from the same face for 5 minutes! My advice, try to heavily reduce the length of them, keep it short and useful for the action and the developing story...
I kind of like the premise of your story, btw, the triangle, the darker plot with the doctor...I am just not sure what to think of the boy, at first he looks a bit lost and sweet, but now he seems more like a horny swearing a-hole who constantly calls his "mother"(in his mind) a bitch... He becomes less and less likeable in my opinion.
Very funny, very sexy, at least the first play through. True, the different kink paths are worthwhile , but it doesn't justify in my opinion the "time travel - let's play an almost identical story again, and again...." routine. 3 times was too much. 2 times with more changes would have been ok.
Thoroughly enjoyed it the first time around with all the geeky references though.
Did it another try, sadly the beginning didn't change, still that nonsensical story about those rumours forwarded to your parents by the schoolmaster, and you get accused and insulted right away by someone you've been all but nice too. What kind of "schoolmaster" tells parents their daughter fools around in the toilets based on rumours ? The MC just measly bows his head, ready to apologize for something that makes no sense. Does it continue to be like that ? I somehow wanted to like the game, but I can't stand stories that impose some conjured up guild on the MC/player, sorry. Drama has to be believable to be accepted, unlike cheerful sexual fantasy. If it sounds made up, stretched, you don't understand why you should feel bad or sympathetic, which has a " cost" for the reader/player that, I don't know, comedy scenes don't have, for example.
Well, the only 1:1 I got was when he wasn't drunk and I disclosed Julian's plot, then Julian leaves and I stay with Ron, but then nothing really works, if I choose "caress" my score first rises, but then takes a dive cause Ron starts to talk about what I did with the couple. All other choices first decrease your points, BUT they actually avoid that topic and the loss of point is ultimately less, which I found rather incoherent. Then Ron goes to sleep and the game ends.
My relation score with Ron at the beginning of the scene is 4.75.The only other variation that I might be missing is if I never went to play with the professor and his wife, which might prompt Ron to say something else, but does it really change anything to the outcome of the scene ? (cause I would have to restart everything)
after the "investigation" in the showers to find Anna, when you regroup with the others. Then there is also the part when Morgana has her jealousy fit and brings you to the virtual world (after you fucked the nurse), she brings an avatar of Anna, and then of Sam, mentioning that you have a "particular" interest in him (you get the choice to trigger a gang rape for both). In both cases, I didn't know why the game assumed I was interested in him.
Yeah, the head injuries... Still, almost all characters find an opportunity to mention how slow it goes up there for him (oddly enough, his sister mentioned in one flash back that he used to read a lot before pumping iron...) ... and some dialogues drag a bit because of his slow grasping of the situation... Naivete and intelligence are a bit different right? :) ... But I am glad to hear about hi future IQ improvements ^^
What about the culture shock though ? I thought your choices would lead to a more open minded approach of sexuality, but his inhibitions still seem to endure...
Well, I have played a a few hours, it's well written, funny and varied, though I am sort of confused as to how the game tracks your kinks, seems a bit of a hit and miss. BUT what's started to irritate me after a while is how the MC appears to be such a dimwit, scaredy cat and the like... I thought at first he was "presented" like this, having become a naive and ignorant young boy due to his upbringing, then evolve.... but now he's looking more and more like a definitive idiot... is there no character ark - evolution here ? I remember having made a "branching path choice" in hell, like "F** off the Pastor and the marine corps", but the MC stays nonetheless god fearing and sheepish... So that clearly didn't count. Should I expect some change, or am I stuck with an airhead with muscles that don't seem to prevent him to be beaten by ANYONE...? I mean I sort of get the overall Femdom / bicurious / submissive vibe (the first doctor check makes it clear by rushing a game over at your first attempt to take charge...) , but still... he just stays a frightened toy boy with an empty skull ? Or can he improve after a while ?
Thanks, Then I already had it installed and forgot about it :)
Yes, Bing and proofreading is the right way to go I think, I like Bing too, although I only used it for German and EN into French.
How did you proceed with the German Version btw ?
Take care
ps: I will also add, your main protagonist is really a great character, I love her :) Her genuine modesty combined with her erotic curiosity make her somehow adorable and full of surprises. It's rare in VNs to have a MC who has a real personality, so congrats.
So, it's a great game, really, but, as some may already have said, the English is often just incomprehensible... is it Chinese translated through google or something ? I thought even AI translation was capable of doing a better job nowadays... I mean I am used to be quite forgiving with VN, and here there are dialogues that I just can't understand, or "think I do maybe".
On a side note, what does the "stepdaughter patch do ?
Ps: I see there is a German version, is it better, cause I understand German too.
AH yes, I remember now, I got a clue later on that "something might have been said" at the first meeting if I did flirt...That clue I think was a monologue from the mc, but it was weird, cause it implied I got an information I actually didn't get ;) It's minor though, good game overall, waiting for the next story update ;)
Well, since he doesn't seem to relish the prospect, I'd be happy to take his place ;) The slight problem here is the nature of the demand from the sadistic couple, they have no way to know if he did it, unless some photographic evidence is involved... but would Julian do that to Ron ? A bit convoluted... so yeah, I'd prefer to be the one seducing Ron, with or without drug ^^
Ashley is not really a romantic option anyway. The "relationship" meter is still baffling me, I was pretty high before the last update with Emily, and at the end, even though I had barely any interaction with her during that whole "rich mansion episode" (obviously 'cause she's not really in it), my meter appeared to have taken a huge dive. and I failed the last check. Weird
Errr... do you like to get insulted and bullied so much ? I wish the writers would tone her down one notch (or two), I agree she can be really good at times (like most of the scenes in the mansion), but often it's just TOO much, especially since the MC is such a WEAK, PASSIV guy. There are scenes where she is downright manipulative and evil, and there is NO ONE to put her in her place. Such bratty character should encounter some opposition, otherwise they become insufferable REAL quick.
Who's Thim ? ;) It must depends on choices then, I barely had any interaction with the male companions. In fact, the least developed characters seemed to me the two Asian siblings (which is weird, since the girl is your de facto girl friend, which also means you and her don't have any arc) and that blond prick who's hostile to you right from the start. I am more curious about that transgender youngster myself...
Ok... well, you're right about the confusion at the beginning, I don't mind anti heroes as such, but context is vastly more important then. Other VN choose blank sheet main characters, which is the easiest (and possibly laziest) way to go, the hardest is to give him a distinct persona without making him too alienating forthe player... I guess there are two ways to play such games, either you distantiate yourself totally from the mc, or you identify with him, but I think the game must very early push you in either direction. Nobody wants to plays and identify with a "moron"... ;)
It can be someone who did something bad, with flaws.... sure, but he must have some redeeming qualities and not be the only black sheep around. That"s how I see it at least. Good luck with the writing anyway!
That's weird, because the beginning of the narrative doesn't really give that impression. But if you say so, then yeah, being put in the shoes of an asshole right away is not really my thing. The problem is, beside the fact that he "believed the nasty rumours" about his sister, he doesn't seem to be such a terrible person.... And then the guest of HIS house, even after I was nice to her, just insults you for breakfast all of a sudden... and the MC is right away sorry etc... Something is missing, to make the player accept/understand the situation somehow. Or, let the girlfriend approach the subject more carefully, rather than being so aggressive, which didn't seem plausible ? Well, it's your game, it started well, honestly, but lately I have been a bit tired of vn using verbal abuse way too easily. I come here to relax, not to get bullied ^^
If you don't like the style, don't play it. It's not exactly the kind of game (or web site) for prickly gentlemen or raising eyebrows at the first sight of taboo looking stuff... I love Ellie myself, and can't wait for the story to continue, is the developer even still working on it since last year ?
